I will be blunt -- in trying to make this your own, you've thrown out everything which made the original fun but didn't really add much else.
The song has no melody, just a single repeating pattern and some boilerplate wub-wubs (to reassure the listener it's actually dubstep). I can only assume the very out-of-place violin solo of the actual melody is so you can still call this "Gyges".
To be fair, the sheer energy of the original is very hard to catch.